>>12285661I don't do these often, so let me know if I'm just not getting something.
>You are anonseems a bit redundant when this is usually the case for these.
>that whole openingYou can just cut it to 'be in Equestria' or something. This isn't a whole fic, it's just a greentext. If it's not central or something you want to elaborate on, cut to the chase.
>You eat, shit, shower, and brush your teeth.Proper order is shit shower shave
>the rectangular plankappreciated, but unnecessary
>you see a dark skinned ponyCheck your're privileges anon scum
>You look into her eyes briefly>Woah dude, do they have contacts in Equestria or something?I know we all know their eyes from pictures, but relying on the reader's knowledge is never a good bet. Describe her eyes.
>Her wings look a lot different from normal pegasisame as above
>Cutie mark is the volume control on a computer with either clouds or semen around it.I
why
>"You know, people don't always like it when you treat your opinions as fact."She stated her opinion after Anon asked her to. Anon confirmed for thin skinned ass patter
>>"Vegetables are awful.">"I *think* that vegetables are awful." you correct her.Anon a bitch nigga
>>Frowning, she quietly states, "For.. sucking blood.">"So you're a vampire bat pony?">>"I- I" she stammers. "It's not like I'm gonna suck your blood or anything! Unless you w-want me to or something."Personal preference, but I just find the bug thing stupid. Also, vampire bats don't eat insects.
Check mate atheists.
>You realize you've never actually touched a pony anywhere but the hooves yet.Max beta even in Equestria
>"Want to play cards or something?">>She looks slightly disappointed. Master of romance
>"Anon." My name is Anon."Should be "'Anon'. My name is Anon."
Anon seemed to have a cubic shit ton of internal monologue. Was pretty cute, I don't know Echo's background enough to judge character, so I'll assume you nailed the reclusive spaghetti mare.
9/10 it's shit -IGN
